Nitpicker's Guide to Piers Anthony's "Incarnations of Immortality" Series

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On a Pale Horse

On a Pale Horse (page numbers from Ballantine Paperback)

page 41: The arrow on the pink stone points "northwest". Zane, however, "turned north, then east, orienting as well as he could on the direction shown." Either Zane's going the wrong way, or "northwest" was a typo.
page 48: In Phoenix, Zane's deathwatch starts running, but he notes "[t]he cat's eye was large; the location was close." However, about 3 pages later, on his way to collect this soul, Zane "was proceeding east across the ocean". That's certainly not close!
page 60: Zane notes "half an hour now registered on the hours dial; he would have to make up that time". How? When Zane arrives early to a death site, he has to wait for the death to occur. He can't make up time by collecting the soul early. In fact, there seems to be NO way in which Zane can make up lost time.
page 62: Why would a player with the initials "O.D." be called "Dose"? Is it short for the pun on "overdose"?
page 64: The Doe who dies is Number 69, possibly a reference to the sexual position.
page 95: Not only do the soul tote-forms look and sound remarkably like Earth's IRS forms, but the Magician also mentions "Line 69-F", a possible sexual reference, and "Line, [square root symbol] 15". Even the most confusing forms generally have integral line numbers. The square root of 15 is an irrational, nonintegral number.
page 98: Zane's butler mentions "[y]ou five are not [dead] technically. The rest of us are". What about Famine, Pestilence, and the other minor Incarnations? Are they also dead, or do they share Zane's status?
page 114: Zane's description of a flying carpet crash in Washington, DC is a reference to a real-life plane crash with similar circumstances. (I need more details about the real-life incident if anyone can provide them)
page 130: Zane starts "I didn't know", and War finishes "[t]hat I existed?". Actually, Zane did know that War existed-- after all, his staff told him about all seven Incarnations earlier!
page 228: Zane reflects on the evolutionary history of the Smoker Dragon ("Both birds and dragons had evolved from the ancient reptiles, ..."). However, the Incarnations universe is strongly tied in to the Christian concept of religion, in which God created the universe in 7 days, and there is no long-term evolution. Considering that Zane is now part of this framework, doesn't he realize there is no long-term evolution on his world?

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